On Waitangi day I went to the pools with mum and Joanna. It was a fin day. We had fish and chips. They tasted yummy and we had hot dogs! Then I went down the slide. It was scary when the water splashed and went all over me. When I went to the warm pool i saw a dollar then went down to get the five dollars. Then I went to the shower and after the shower i got changed. Then I called Joanna to have a shower. Then I went in the car after Joanna finished her shower. Mum and Joanna went outside to have dinner.
Hi Vanessa,
ReplyDeleteI really like your writing. Maybe next time you should not put the word then very time. Keep up the good work.
Hi Vanessa
ReplyDeleteI really like your story about waitangi day maybe next time you would not like to put so many then but still keep up the good work in class.