Thursday, July 29, 2010


On a nice hot, sunny day I was very excited because my Dad decided to bake a cake. One that had Milo in it and another cake with cocoa in it. At first we got the ingredients and we started to bake the cake.We put the cake in the oven and waited till it was ready.

Ring! The bell rang from the oven and I screamed because I had a shock and my sisters laughed and laughed. We checked the cakes in the oven and we saw one of the cakes was melted but still it did taste nice. So we told our dad about it. He said to put it on a tray. One of my sisters took out the cake, it cracked into pieces. Then my dad said that we could eat it. My favourite part was when we ate the cake and it tasted nice.


  1. Well done Eden, this is a great recount of your day with your Dad. Freshly baked cake is wonderful. :-)
    It is lovely to see you are starting to use paragraphs in your writing. It is really helpful for the reader to understand your story if there are paragraphs. In your next post maybe only put 1 idea in each paragraphs, which will help your reader even more.

    Miss G

  2. I am really pleased you have been able to get your writing onto the class blog. Sometimes even when things don't go exactly as planned you can still have a great time.