Friday, August 17, 2012

A Disappointed Man

I can see an athlete feeling sad. A man wearing blue, stretchy shorts and soft, black, short hair. I can smell the sweat from the man. I can hear the crowd cheering for someone. I can feel tiny tears coming out of his eyes. I am thinking he is disappointed.


  1. Well done Jane with your writing.

  2. I like your describing words. I like the way you have described the athletes hair. Good thinking about the athlete being disappointed. Good job on your writing. I like the way you said that the crowd was cheering as you can see the crowd in the background.

    Mikaela, Malia, Courtney, Teanoano, Ella

  3. wow great work jane see you at school